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moragmacpherson ([personal profile] moragmacpherson) wrote2011-05-16 10:31 pm

Ficlet: Dream a Little [REDACTED] Of Me (SPN/Inception xover)

This is for [info]callowyn, who told me she'd finally watch Inception if I wrote an Inception fusion with the SPN episode "Dream a Little Dream of Me".  Quick, dirty, and un-beta'd, but a heck of a lot of fun to write.

Title: Dream a Little [REDACTED] Of Me
Author: [personal profile] moragmacpherson 
Genre: Gen
Rating:
PG-13
Word Count: 470
Fandoms: Supernatural, Inception
Characters: Arthur, Eames, Sam, Dean, Bela, Jeremy
Timeline: Dream a Little Dream of Me (SPN 3.10), pre-movie for Inception
Contents Include: Surprisingly little, but some implied Eames/Bela and if you squint really close, Arthur/Eames
Disclaimer: Supernatural belongs to Eric Kripke, the CW, and their associated corporate identities; Inception belongs to Christopher Nolan, Warner Brothers, and their associated corporate identities
Summary: The story of what really happened lies between the redactions


PROJECT [REDACTED] - CONFIDENTIAL - TOP SECRET

MEMO RE: ROGUE SUBJECT FROM [REDACTED] STUDY BEING CONDUCTED IN [REDACTED]

DATE: [REDACTED]/[REDACTED]/2008

TO: DIRECTOR [REDACTED]

FROM: SFC A. [REDACTED]

_________________________

Based on news reports and intelligence gathered by [REDACTED], I traveled to [REDACTED], accompanied by Lt. [REDACTED] in order to investigate multiple instances of death and/or coma resulting from potential overdoses of [REDACTED] compounds.  Upon my arrival at [REDACTED] University where I met Professor [REDACTED], I conducted an audit of their supplies of both the [REDACTED]  and of processed [REDACTED] compounds and discovered that only small quantities of the raw ingredient [REDACTED] were missing from the University's stores while Lt. [REDACTED] began interviewing subjects of the study.

Upon further investigation it became clear that J. [REDACTED], one of the most promising candidates of the [REDACTED] study, was capable of lucid [REDACTED] and [REDACTED] using only unprepared [REDACTED] without the benefit of either refined [REDACTED] compounds or a [REDACTED] device.  This circumstance has yet to be replicated in any of our other [REDACTED] studies in [REDACTED], [REDACTED], [REDACTED], or, according to Lt. [REDACTED] by any European agencies also cooperating in Project [REDACTED], but is proof of the viability of investigating remote [REDACTED] in further research studies.

Unfortunately, further inquiries and/or interrogation of J. [REDACTED] were prevented by the intervention of a pair of civilians, identified from IAFIS  as D. [REDACTED] and S. [REDACTED] (see attachment A, Fingerprint Analysis).  These civilians experienced [REDACTED] as the subject of dreams constructed by [REDACTED] and in the process of extricating themselves from the dreams, killed [REDACTED].  It is not clear why the death during [REDACTED] resulted in J. [REDACTED]'s death rather than his return to consciousness as is routine when [REDACTED] using the [REDACTED] device.  This should be regarded as a potential complication in replicating J. [REDACTED]'s process for in pursuit of achieving remote [REDACTED].

Attempts to [REDACTED] the events of the [REDACTED] from the minds of the fugitives D.[REDACTED] or S. [REDACTED] were ineffective due to their apparently extensive experience at evading capture (see attachment B, FBI file compiled by Agent V. [REDACTED]).  Their escape may also have been assisted by an as yet unidentified female, apparently of ambiguous European origin, whose DNA is not in the Interpol database.  Please see the report of Lt. [REDACTED] for the specific details of how the unknown female subject's DNA was obtained and the exact circumstances of the male subjects' escape.

Additional red flags have been attached to the FBI files of D. [REDACTED] and S. [REDACTED] so that in the event of their eventual capture, we can further investigate their experiences of remote [REDACTED].  Also, due to the aroused suspicion of hospitals in the [REDACTED] area and at [REDACTED] University, I recommend the termination of the [REDACTED] study and a thorough audit of all [REDACTED] supplies at our remaining research centers.

CC:
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[personal profile] unikorento 2011-05-19 07:06 pm (UTC)(link)
This was really tough to get a hang of in the beginning - but then it turned out to be so very awesome. *applauds* I think you captured the whole Inception mentality really well, and, well, yes. Very cool. :)

[identity profile] hermione-vader.livejournal.com 2011-05-19 08:45 pm (UTC)(link)
I want to like this, and the idea is really clever, but you've used the word "[REDACTED]" so many times that it distracts from the events described in the actual report. And I can't figure out which Inception character is supposed to be writing this (at first, I thought it was Cobb, but it could be any of them). This is a great idea, but it's still a bit rough.

[identity profile] moragmacpherson.livejournal.com 2011-05-19 08:58 pm (UTC)(link)
I appreciate the honest criticism.

To answer your last question first, because it's easier: Arthur's writing it (the "from" line in the header reads Sergeant First Class A. [No Last Canon Name Given] - the military rank disqualifies Ariadne, leaving us with Arthur. I pulled a similar trick with Eames by having Arthur refer to him as Lieutenant rather than his unknown first name.

As to the redactions, and the repeated use thereof, this fic is an homage to a Freedom of Information Act request that I once filed and received, in return, three pages of blacked out lines (the preferred US government method of redaction). The only way I could have made sense of the information at all was if I'd known all the circumstances to begin with, which I didn't. Similarly, this fic is intended to be nigh impenetrable, unless you're intimately familiar with both sets of canon - in which case, the only real question in my mind is whether Bela chained Eames to the bed or the radiator or both.

I acknowledge that the [REDACTED]s are a little distracting - do you think it would work better if I actually did replace them with black bars? It would require a bit more coding on my part, but if you feel it would improve the story, I'd be willing to go through with it.

Again, thanks for taking the time to leave such specific and helpful criticism.

[identity profile] etrix.livejournal.com 2011-05-20 03:51 am (UTC)(link)
I have to agree with the first commenter; I found my eyes skipping to the next [REDACTED] rather than reading the actual story, so black bars or empty spaces would definitely be prefered.

I have to admit I also had a problem with the actual redaction. As I work in an Information and Privacy office up here in Canada, I saw V. ... and thought 'they can't redact that because he was a government official working in his official capacity'.

LOL... I need to get out more obviously.

[identity profile] calamityjim.livejournal.com 2011-05-20 07:36 pm (UTC)(link)
I know what you were trying to do and you get points for that, but I'm having the same problem as everyone else. When writing a story based on another 'not story' format sometimes you have to make sacrifices. Like District 9. It's a mock documentary but they have footage in the movie that would have never made it into a documentary, so the movie breaks form but it does so in order to better tell the story.

Part of your problem is your [REDACTED]s are all caps. People's eyes jump to all caps because we think it's more important. Using small caps, like [redacted] would have been smoother. Another option you could have used would have been the s̶t̶r̶i̶k̶e̶ ̶t̶h̶r̶o̶u̶g̶h̶. While not entirely accurate for the format it makes for a better story as it is a bit less muddled a read but it still gets at the form and the idea of censorship.

Switching to black bars would not help, because they draw the eye in the same way that all caps text does. Next time I suggest going with small caps or the strike through, or a similar format.

So E for effort but the presentation needs a bit of tweaking. XD

Отличный блог!

[identity profile] clioqen.livejournal.com 2011-06-06 02:24 pm (UTC)(link)
Хорошо! Все бы так писали :)Image (http://site-sex-znakomstva.ru/)

[identity profile] tabaqui.livejournal.com 2011-09-27 08:40 pm (UTC)(link)
Heeee!
I like it. Though it's creepy to think of the guy from DaLDoM being part of the dreamshare project.

Neat!